Friday, October 8, 2010

Water Pollution (Second Draft)

                    Water pollution is a very dangerous problem in our life. Water pollution means the presence of any material in the water that is harmful to all the organisms on the earth. There are many reasons for spreading this phenomenon. Water pollution affects drinking water, rivers, oceans, and all the resources of water all over the world. Water pollution harms human health and the nature. And in this essay we will try to find some suitable solutions. 

                     On the one hand, there are many causes of water pollution. One of the most important causes is the oil which is leaking in the rivers and seas from the ships. Another reason is sewage water which throw in all the clean and pure resources of water. This sewage water contains alot of bacteria and germs. Water is also polluted through throwing chemicals of the factories in the seas. In addition to, farmers who threw deadly animals and birds in the rivers.

                  On the other hand, the effects of water pollution are several. The pollution in the rivers, seas, and oceans can kill the fish and the other organisms that live in these resources of water. Water pollution can harm human health. It can be the leading causes of many human diseases such as: heart disease, blood diseases, diarrhea, vomiting, etc. Polluted water is full of toxins. Many of these toxins are cancered, which can cause cancer for human.

                 Moreover, there are some suggested solutions that can help to reduce this problem. Firstly, the government should put awareness programmers which help the people to understand the importance of the water in their lifes. Secondly, radioactive wastes should be buried in the desert in stead of throwing them in the seas and oceans. Thirdly, the best way to disposal the wastes of the factories is to recycle them instead of  throwing them in the rivers.

                  Finally, water pollution becomes one of the worst kinds of pollution. We should co-operate together to reduce the dangers of this problem.

5 comments:

  1. An excellent essay, but you need to make the following corrections
    which threw (wrong tense)

    who throw deadly (dead) animals and birds in the rivers.

    water in their lifes(lives).

    in the desert in stead (one word)

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  2. corrections to the first part of the essay
    Water pollution is a very dangerous problem in our life. Water pollution means the presence of any material in the water that is harmful to all the organisms on the earth. There are many reasons for spreading this phenomenon. Water pollution affects drinking water, rivers, oceans, and all the resources of water all over the world. Water pollution harms human health and the nature. And in this essay we will try to find some suitable solutions.

    On the one hand, there are many causes of water pollution. One of the most important causes is the oil which is leaking in the rivers and seas from the ships. Another reason is sewage water which threw (wrong tense) in all the clean and pure resources of water. This sewage water contains alot of bacteria and germs. Water is also polluted through throwing chemicals of the factories in the seas. In addition to, farmers who throw deadly (dead) animals and birds in the rivers.

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  3. corrections of the second part of the essay
    On the other hand, the effects of water pollution are several. The pollution in the rivers, seas, and oceans can kill the fish and the other organisms that live in these resources of water. Water pollution can harm human health. It can be the leading causes of many human diseases such as: heart disease, blood diseases, diarrhea, vomiting, etc. Polluted water is full of toxins. Many of these toxins are cancered, which can cause cancer for human.

    Moreover, there are some suggested solutions that can help to reduce this problem. Firstly, the government should put awareness programmers which help the people to understand the importance of the water in their lifes(lives). Secondly, radioactive wastes should be buried in the desert in stead (one word) of throwing them in the seas and oceans. Thirdly, the best way to disposal the wastes of the factories is to recycle them instead of throwing them in the rivers.

    Finally, water pollution becomes one of the worst kinds of pollution. We should co-operate together to reduce the dangers of this problem.

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  4. thanks Dr:Samah
    i already have changed the mistakes

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  5. your essay is amazing.it has a perfect main idea.
    it contains valuable information about the problem.
    your words are clear and precise expect word
    *cancered *is not clear.
    you should take care of tense in this sentence*Another reason is sewage water which throw in all the clean and pure resources of water*
    Totally you write an excellent essay.

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